Folk have said, better to love
& lost than never to have loved,
but I try to comprehend
to what sensible end
is this unrequited hunger
for your touch.
If only you would listen
to the words that seem to glisten
with a crystal fragile longing
for you such that I would dry up
like a bit of moss in drought.
& folks tell me that I ought
to let you go,
let the longing float
up like an offered balloon.
So might I swoon
to faint in hunger or oxy deprivation,
no sooner might I give up my dream
of us in love than stop breathing.
Author notes
My name is John Peter Creighton.
I also go by John Tarik Walker or King John (a joke, just a joke folks)
Here is my quote, so I acknowledge receipt as of this morning before I rush off to work at the circuit board factory:
"It's been three whole days since I've had sleep
Because I dream of his lips on your cheek""
A contest entry
- Miserable At Best by poetrytoopeneyes.
600 points, ended May 26, 2008, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Maybe the best way to say thanks is to be real, to do good for the one whom you wish to thank
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Nice job...
You did well here. '... like an offered balloon... ' I<<< like that.
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Very good work here
It holds such love within it for another and is written very well -
Hi, wondering if you're still working on this or if I can look at it as final (or start giving my opinion on it).
It's really good!
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Hi poetrytoopeneyes
Sorry; I was in a hard situation between work and love and trying to balance what is still alive of my writing career. lol
I'm at times a perfectionist, but I'm at an impasse on this right now. I almost withdrew it, but you say you think it's good, and I'd like to honor your contest with a generous heart if I can.
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That's unfortunate, hope all goes well for you.
No, it's really good, leave it in!
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Thank you!
:-)
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Hi! Here's your quote, I hope it works for you!
"It's been three whole days since I've had sleep
Because I dream of his lips on your cheek"
No rush to write!
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