The ground breaths briskly
unpredictably dancing across eyelids like shooting stars
pulsating metallic colored diamonds surround
My hand releases invisible web
tying dreams and progression together
as themes that pull at the universe
Blissful, beautiful,patience
A contest entry
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300 points, ended May 31, 2008, 60 entries
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"My hand releases invisible web
tying dreams and progression together
as themes that pull at the universe "
These are awesome lines. This whole poem is eloquent and the flow is absolutely amazing. Nice job.
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this is good.
it really painted an image for me.
pulsating metallic colored diamonds surround
something about that just flows, along with the rest of the poem. i'm not good at telling why i like something, but this one really got me. i wish i could say more. i think you're really progressing in your writing.
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Anything with stars in automatically endears me to a poem! The lack of punctuation is interesting, and I also like the idea of an invisible web - keep on truckin'
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Lovely language. I especially love the way it describes the perfect, dream-filled night. I'm glad I had a chance to read this poem; thank you for sharing!
Cheers for the read,
Nocturne -
hmm, i like it. the flow and word choice intrests me.
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