Let us not be premature, my Love.
Do not uncap my tender flower’s bud
(yet untouched
by empty word and fouling finger . . .
despite their constant strokings)
until this heart
has been discovered
by soft, persistent wooing
--immaculate knowing.
But upon that sweet discovery,
oh, yes! upon that swift, awakening force,
when time and temperate passions
can harness me no more,
this cup will burst
and leaves will drip
with every oil,
with every aromatic nard
your deepest need requires--
soothing you,
displaying me
in perfect eucalyptus' show.
Author notes
Eucalyptus amygdalin (Labille) is the tallest variety of eucalyptus in Australia. The leaves are studded with glands containing a fragrant volatile oil. The flowers in bud are covered with a cup-like membrane which is thrown off as a lid when the flower expands.
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A contest entry
- #71 at Winklings for members and Friends from Allpoetry. by Lyndon.
3000 points, ended June 7, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrite 1000 pt. Checklist by Ryno.
1000 points, ended July 18, 2008, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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_Yes_ Creativity / Originality
_Yes_ Imagery
_Yes_ Metaphor
_Yes_ Emotion
_Yes_ Reaction
_Yes_ Relatability
_Yes_ Fluency
_Yes_ Powerful Beginning
_Yes_ Powerful Middle
_Yes_ Powerful Ending
_Yes_ Connecting Ideas
_Yes_ Interesting Idea Behind Piece and/or a Message Behind Piece
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Beautifully written ...
with a sensual touch. I loved the lull of the title: Labille.
Well done!
Love
Myra
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This poem is rather beautiful
How it was missed by me, I know. I commented and then the comment went "Zoom!" when I wished to tell you that you were writing about a botanist in 'Labille'. The tree he identified is the tallest in the world: The Southern Australian Blue-Gum. Eucalyptus globulus was first collected on the south-east coast of Tasmania in 1792-93 by Jacques-Julien Houton de Labillardiere (1755-1834) and described by him in 1799. He was a distinguished French botanist who accompanied Bruny D'Entrecasteaux on the expedition in La Recherche and L'Esperance in 1791-94 in search of their missing compatriot, La Perouse.
I would have voted that this poem would have been a finalist. 
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Ten, this is so excellent! romantic and sensuous for me as well, nicley nicley done bravo
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very nice...a message of patience and a promise of rewards, a delightful proposition no doubt...like a flower in its own time...very well done...PK
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Tender and smoothly written. I like how you have given the progression of imagery through words here. Powerful yet softly delivered.
The last few lines are just superb
Keep sharing your gift and best of luck in the contest.
HENSLEY
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wow - this is a beautiful & perfect metaphor for letting love mature....and quite a sensual poem here!!
so lovely...best of luck to you in the contest
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Love the opening of the poem. The uncapping of your bud is just perfectly sensuous. This has a lovely flow that draws in the reader and makes us want more. Like a whisper in my ear~
~ Joyce
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You make this Aussie heart glad, and you make me smile with what you have written You'd make a ripper sheila lol but you already are in my eyes! Love, C
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how beautiful this is...So lovely in imagery and emotion flowing so softly through each line...I always love using flowers and nature personified, so I love this one!
Lynda
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