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My Hands Will See His Soul

 

 

 As each day passes I watch him die.

Slowly, surely with no reprieve.

It is sundown that brings the worst of times;

For darkness seems so final.

A well worn pattern plays out each night;

Watching, waiting, knowing death will come;

Announced or unannounced.

My hands lightly touching, to feel his warmth,

And the gentle rise of his chest.

Memorizing in the darkness his field  of energy.

For when he returns than my hand's will know his presence;

Day or night.

 

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opyion 7 skye01 beautiful lies
Number 7 feeling the presence of another with my hands and feeling the energy fields of another for healing touch
feeling energy

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  • kareneisenlord gold member
    October 31

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    This brought tears to my eyes~ so very moving and tender is it. I can so relate to every word going through the death of my late husband. I saw his spirit when he died. I believe in the energy fields that surround our body and our astral bodies and soul! This is exquisitely beautiful and I was touched beyond measure with how you used your hands to memorize all of the essense that is him. It was around that time that I was most sensitive to auras too. Thank you for sharing this with us here. I feel blessed that you did.


  • Dark Otter
    February 19

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    This is touching

    at a different level; the identity of psychic awareness. I have experienced this myself so I am in tune with what you are saying. A fine peom that I will have to consider again.


  • poeticcaresses
    November 29, 2008

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    Wow. This is beautiful and sad. So simple yet so touching. My husband is 10 years older than me and sometimes says to me "I wont always be here" when talking about our future plans and making sure I'm taken care of. I always tell him "don't even say that". I can't stand the thought of losing him. I can empathize with your pain and fear ever so clearly. I'm sorry for your pain and loss. If ever you need to talk please feel free to message me. Best of wishes.


  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    July 6, 2008
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    Good write.


  • Lyndon gold member
    June 6, 2008

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    I found it difficult

    to relate this poem to the prompt picture. I am willing to admit it could well be my fault.
    Thank you.
    Lyndonm of the Winklings.


  • Condemd RyeZing
    June 2, 2008
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    Nice job. Lots of emotion. Beautiful write.


  • MissStranger
    June 1, 2008
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    3xBravo!


  • unanswered
    May 31, 2008

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    I found this to be sad and yet touching. It is dark but in a diffrent way. I really liked it. I cam feel the emotion as I read it. It caputured an intense sadness. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.

  • Honeydew
    May 27, 2008
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    wow

    i really like your poem!!! thanks for entering!!!


  • fallinxalone
    May 24, 2008
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    this was beautiful. thank you for entering!


  • pancake
    May 22, 2008
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    That was lovely. Very unusual and powerful. Thanks for entering. Good luck!


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    May 17, 2008

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    You touched me ..a thought provoking scenario you have portrayed ..I love this piece..thanks for sharing it...


  • daviscth silver member
    May 12, 2008
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    Oh wow. This is simply wonderful. I enjoyed every line of this!


  • maa gold member
    May 10, 2008

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    what a truly touching poem ...
    while reading your verse and tuning into the scenario, the passing of my father-in-law came into my mind ... it was the most sacred moment I have ever witnessed ... and the most precious gift I have yet received, to be present during his soul leaving the body ... his last message was : "nothing really happens ..." I shall cherish it always ...

    much love,
    marion


  • Simply Simple
    May 7, 2008

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    Wow... That sounds so lame, but wow. This is amazing. So sad as well. I can't think of anything to say... I am speechless at the profound emotion, for lack of a better word, this portrays. Thank you.


  • Perception
    May 4, 2008

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    O... Very dark... I like your descriptions though, and your emotional attachment to this poem... I can just feel your emotion... through every line...
    This is very well done

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