Would you
take this lame
insolent being
and hold me anyway
trip my wandering feet
from the crag of error
see that my passion
be known fully
by the sculpter of
Venus and all hearts,
you, with your tender
everything
who chased me through
mountain deep water
pulled back ocean drapes
so I could walk through
dry land and honey
and there in my pity
you will change
this beggar into the
love of your life.
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100th Hoodwink!
Your tender poem/prayer, reaching out in humbleness of heart touched my spirit, so easily I could relate to this plea. When we stop and consider who we are in the divine light of who God is, all arrogance ceases and we gain a glimpse of understanding of the Grace and Mercy extended to us. Thank you for sharing this thoughtful write.
May God continue to bless.
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Honeyed words!
As free verse is not my forte, it is a pleasure to read it done so well by others. You have a marvelous job. A piece worthy of gold.
Regards,
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Honeyed words!
As free verse is not my forte, it is a pleasure to read it done so well by others. You have a marvelous job. A piece worthy of gold.
Regards,
Jennifer
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I like it
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The heart
Wow is this ever a plea to be loved by another. Would he? i guess with words such as these he would have no choice. Some are true writers and some are me
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He is the champion of unrequited love...
I really believe he would show us more love than we could imagine... if...
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Your poetry as I already knew is so far above anything I can fathom bubbles up here again. I am not certain if He is the intention of this piece or he is the recepient. Forgive me for struggling between the thoughts. I have come to know you and just can't be sure. The outcome of the write suggests to me that this is forever overcoming mortal. Only one I know could change a beggar to the love of one's life. However, this could very well relate to this mortal plane as well. I like the suggestion and am blown away that that is an option with one of yuor pieces. RC
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Yes. Basically, for me, it is about how God comes to where WE are instead of where we think we have to be to meet Him. With just a little faith and some surrender to the passion, He finds us and makes us the apple of His eye. Don't know hhhhhoooooooowwww he does it.
It reminds me of THEE most passionate love affair there could be. I will say that my influence of this form and style is from a fantastic Chilean Poet, Pablo Neruda whose vulnerability translates the core feelings of the human condition.http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Pablo_Neruda
Your comment was rich and flattering, but mostly discerning. I couldn't ask for a greater review. Thank you so much ...again.
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Wow.
This is so wondrous, so humble in perfection ... I can simply rejoice in seeing the mercy of love divine ...
Did I tell you ENOUGH that I adore your poetry?
Love
Myra
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Awesome!
Interesting structure, nicely done. There is an extra space between your and tender which jerks the word out, I don't know if this is intentional. Interesting use of italics. No spelling mistakes spotted. Awesome!
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Thank you for a nice comment and proofread.
Nope. Space not intended.
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