You really ought to know that by now.
I hope I've not given it away.
Singing songs that are too relevant.
Yes, you're my hero. Not just mine.
I've always adored those who can be who I'm not.
But I know I'm not flying either.
You are the wind, soaring high above.
I am a kitesurfer, far below.
You're the only thing keeping me above water.
Author notes
Inspired by the following song lyrics:
Did you ever know that you're my hero,
and everything I would like to be?
I can fly higher than an eagle,
'cause you are the wind beneath my wings
What do you think of the structure?
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Ohhhhhh! How clever. Lots of brilliant contrasts between the up and the down, and the good metaphors used.
Only suggestion I have is to let go of most of the punctuation. Poetry needs to ' f l y ' and in this case, it is a perfect example of why it has to.
Wonderful piece!
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