The parasite shall
consume
my flawed skin ,
gnawing
imperfection
until the raw truth
is bared
Author notes
this picture reminded me of myself, and the evil i feel inside me when i hurt myself. im hopefully going to get help soon. please only comment about the poem and not my issues. i just felt that an explanation was nesisary for the poem to be understood...
oh, the title has a personal meaning, if that didnt make any sense, haha
written may 4, 2008
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A contest entry
- One prompt.... by phoenixonfire.
300 points, ended May 8, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what do you think?
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WOW!! Just seems like someone slit my throat without mercy...excellent choice of words!! thanks for entering and good luck!
Pri
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thanks so much for the comment and for the gold!
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After seeing the prompt - wow! I really like the way that you have verbalised what you are feeling - it is beautiful and touching, not to mention courageous
sometimes you remind me a lot of the girl in I Never Promised You A Rose Garden, you have a similar way with words and beautiful expression
Keep writing
Polly
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I can't say I understand but that's fine. From accounts from friends and family that know better than I, I think you have put this well. There is some sort of passiveness that is implicit through your choice of words e.g. 'shall'. I think you did well to describe it in negative terms (a flesh eating parasite just isn't nice) yet there is also an acceptance... now I'm just rambling, great write and thanks for sharing
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haha, its ok, i ramble all the time too, lol. thanks so much for your amazing comments!
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