I want to hide within you.
I want to sit between your eyelashes
and feel the sparkle of your eyes on my skin.
I want to curl up in your palm
and listen to your deepest thoughts.
I want to crawl beneath your freckles
and hear your energy rush through you.
I want to hide within you.
In a corner where only you can find me;
where I can feel your breath on me
so I know I’ll never be alone,
and where I can be sure
we will always be one.
I want to hide within you,
and become every kiss you offer my lips.
I want to feel every skipped heart beat
and I want to live within our moments
of passion forever.
I want to hide within you.
Author notes
for my boyfriend, Ben
In a list
A contest entry
- A love That Surpasses All. by Poetryintheblood.
525 points, ended September 15, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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ANOTHER WOW.....
YOU DESERVE TO BE ADDED TO MY FAVOURITES!!
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I like that you repeat your phrase: I want to hide within you, throughout the piece. I also like the depth of the desire that is instilled in this piece.
and become every kiss you offer my lips.
That's a great line. Nice job. I look forward to reading more of your work.
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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Another luscious literary affair... The beauty of this poem is spoiled by poor "contempary" poets who overuse such words. They are ineffective. Obviously this is not.
Congrats
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I want to hide within you
that from you i may never depart.
deep within you
at the foundation of your heart.
this is a great piece.. i like it.
thanks for sharing. n keep up the good work.
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i love this
it reminds me of my girlfriend and I
this is very amazing
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I like this a lot. This was wonderful writing. Deep, and full of emotion. You poured all of yourself into this piece and it shows. I shall read more of you.
Darkest
Wishes
Wayne Leon
x
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I loved the first and second stanzas. Honestly, after I read the second, the poem felt complete. The third didn't really add anything new to the mix...and I think the ending of the second stanza is stronger than the third.
that said, lovely poem. I wish you happiness with Ben!
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sigh...it is wonderful to feel this way about someone...to want to understand, know every inch of their soul. There is great passion in this write...truly heartfelt. Enjoyed!
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This is beautiful/ You have a style of writing than comes from deep thought. Something most people wouldnt compare. I love this, it gives you a new out look. great job
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aw this is such a beautiful, gorgeous and heartfelt piece! you are really lucky to feel love like this and your feelings are clear to see and expressed beautifully.
i wish you and your boyfriend all the love and happiness in the world...best of luck, and thanks for sharing! -
very good
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