we were once lovers, in times of old,
it was once me that was no longer cold,
then something happened you broke my heart,
it wasn't the first time but it still tore me apart,
my hearts never mended, that's clear to see,
but i try to hide the sorrow that i feel inside me...
you watched me fall, you didn't offer a hand,
and now i pretend that life is just grand,
I'm good at fake smiles,
I'm good at pretending to be OK,
I'm sick of life and its constant trials,
in my head I'm always crying, but you wouldn't care anyway...
I want to cut, so i can ease my pain,
maybe when Ive made a slice, ill...
feel something but broken [feeling OK would be a start]
unfreeze the ice [Locked around my heart]
see in color again [seeing in black and white is a sorrowful art]
To watch the bloody paint running from my arm,
if i feel numb you cant cause me harm,
don't tell me you care, when its all a lie,
Don't tell me to stay alive when you'd pay to watch me die...
and when my blood is on the floor,
maybe then you will be happier then before,
you tainted me with lies, [walked out of the door]
your not the only one, so let another one come,
there's no further stage of broken i can become,
My first words will be to you:
save me from the nothingness inside of me,
don't taint me with lies, I'm already broken cant you see...
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hope its ok...
A contest entry
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300 points, ended May 6, 2008, 27 entries
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The Picture was amazing.
Strong words. Well done hun
Mylee -
i liked it
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DEEP STUFF!!=.( VERY SAD AND FULL OF EMOTION..THANKS FOR ENTERING.. SARAH
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wow
This is just simply amazing. I felt this raw emotion and sorrow that [you] feel. The words were so strong and the rhyme was consitent too. I love rhyme so this to me is just a marvellous write. It's so effective and powerful and its clear to me you are a very talented poet. I just loved it and I look forward to reading more from you. I see this is for a contest piece - good luck I hope you do well. Ps - the picture is really good too [i take it is a picture promt contest, if not - the picture really reflected this beautiful piece]
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Well penned
In my own little evil manipulative ways I can understand this write quite well as I have bene down that road more times than I care to even think about. I do like how you worded your poem here Sweetems but furthermore I am more impressed by the depth you placed into this and the sheer quality of this write too. futhermore I add that from my own personal taste this is one of the best writes I have read thus far. any ways kudos Sweetems on the awesome job you did with this poem & keep up the good work & good luck wth the contest.
<3 Me 
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This was just so heartbreaking.. But I'm happy that you were able to write this and get your emotions out! It can be a hard thing to do sometimes, write about something so personal, yet unable to keep it in any longer.. I'm sorry that you have been treated this way! You seem like a lovely young woman and for someone to treat you this way saddens my heart.. But you have people that care for you and want you to be happy.. I hope that someday this hurt heals.. You deserve to be able to have whole heart and someone who will love you and not hurt you!!! I hope that day comes soon!!! you did a wonderful job hun!
Angel
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I'm glad you wrote, this is truly heartbreaking. The emotions are so raw and clear. when I would cut I always did it just to feel alive, because after a while you are simply numb, but most of the time the cutting never helps.
When you cut, you're letting her win, you're letting both of them win, and i'm sure you don't want that.
Breaking free of SI, is putting you in control of your self. Because you're the only one who can change how you feel about life and certain situations. Everyone's going to hurt you at one point or another, more than likely. You just have to be prepared and now that there are people here to help you, that love and care for you and hate to see you hurting.
I hope this in one way or another helped you.
The imagery is so vivid ♥
Please, don't let them win.
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