Inhabiting the will of the lonely, I write these words. Hoping that you read my desperate reverie....of how a poet used his words to poetically murder me. The day we last spoke has grown old, although my love for you is still young. The last time we touched is just a memory but keeps me company as your absence has left me alone. Process my request of patience as I ask why? I am no longer the core of your world, the center of your eye. When did I go from your soul mate to just your lover? When did I go from being your only, to your other? You haven't a ruler for the slightest measure? Of the impact of the storm that you condemned me to solely weather? Tell me that this is fair, so I can get a mirror and show you a liar. Why can't we just share the pain, like the love we so equally acquired? Can I ask of you to loosen the seams of your pride and unclothe the answer to the reason why, you decide that it was I, whom was your everything...yet now I am where your nothing lies.
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Option 1
A contest entry
- the continuing war between love and hate by Cerbie20.
680 points, ended May 10, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow, powerful stuff here, It should have won 1st. I surely missed you too and the way your words glide across the screen....damn!
My favorite line "Tell me that this is fair, so I can get a mirror and show you a liar"
You have any idea how many people I'd like to do this too? lol, you never cease to amaze chica!
~Lia
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such strong emotions flow through every word
I can almost hear a person say it out loud! Keep penning more
Best Wishes
Smilingshadow
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Mmm... I feel this. Nice Spoken Word style too. One of my favorite forms.
Thanks for sharing.
John
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When did I go from your soul mate to just your lover? When did I go from being your only, to your other?
i love these words because i can relate to these right now. i had a boyfriend that treated me like i was everything, and then, out of nowhere, it was, you are the other girl now. it sucks. but good job. i like the rhyming. and i also like how you have it in like a paragraph. i have never seen it like this before, so it was a nice change.
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"When did i go from being your only, to your other?" wow!i really like that line.your words show how you felt then and how you feel now.this is a great piece
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DAMN!!!!! These are words that show true emotion. Nothing is held back. There are no games being played. We have all been through this. In that state of "what the hell" or "how did we get here"? I definitely felt this piece. I relate to this piece. You never forget, but somehow you do move past the pain. All it takes is realizing that it's there mistake, not yours. One day they'll want back what they gave up and it will be too late. Sooooooooooo glad to read something from you, girl. Don't make me wait so long next time. LOL. - cgirl0410
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Thanks girl! you know your seal of approval means a lot.
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a good piece, ah such is the way of love and life, we fall in and out of love all the time, truth and lies, we all need the mirror
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thanks, and oh how your words ring so true.
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