What am I feeling you ask, it is simple. I am feeling sadness. Without you I have no more joy, no more passion. Without you my heart suffers greatly.
I want you to succeed! Find your path my love. Then come back to me. No more endless silences. I beg of you please no more silences, enlighten me I just want to hear your voice again. Don't leave me in this gloomy endless night alone.
Author notes
I think that I used the song better in time though not sure. It's been a while since I wrote it.
Trekkergirl
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- Song Inspiration :) by Beauty Of Silence.
1200 points, ended May 17, 2008, 11 entries
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I used the song Better in time
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Heartbreaking words
Short & to the point. Good job.
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your comments on my poem THE ENDLESS NIGHT
thanks for the comment on my poem. Yes, it was suppose to be short. I appreciate you taking the time out to comment. Makes me feel good to know that people are reading things that I have written.
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trekkergirl
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I really like the way the lines are long. It seems to me to add to the desperate tone in this poem. I've never heard the song but have a good idea based on your poem.
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very good! *thumbsup*
I think this was a very interesting piece! it had great depth hidden within those simple words of yours! There was great sorrow weaved into each line of this amazing poem!
Thanks for this enttry and best of luck to you! please do add the option of song choice! thanks!
Much love alwyas,
Ranji
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