Time passes on as we pass out
like the snuffing of the wind
emanates the breeze delicately refined
and space without sound surrounds all eternity
like the shaded and sunny sides of a hill
earth depends on Sun and Moon eternally
Sooner or later a situation is reversed
Happy or sad it will fade it does not last
Are we lost in time swinging to and fro?
dangling helplessly, afraid to let go
Close you eyes, open up your mind
Let the spiritual and physical become intricately entwined
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A contest entry
- CHARCOAL & DIAMONDS...Lost Writes Round II ENCOURAGEMENT TOURNAMENT by Blue Rew.
1050 points, ended May 19, 2008, 3 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Its all about the comments by LadyLullaby.
700 points, ended August 11, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this had a really nice feel to it, It felt like i was looking in on it yet looking out at the same time.
Grrr... I'm not making any sense.
A wonderfull write and I wish you all the best in the contest.
Rose
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I particularly liked "space without sound surrounds all eternity." This read puts me in mind of a contemplation made from out in space, looking back at light and shadows on the hilly earth, noticing sun and moon and planetary relationships.
Time passes, momentums and circumstances change, and can we trust enough to let go of the realities we have defined to accept those of a different level?
I enjoyed this.
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This is a sensational write...
expressing a profound wisdom of insight.
A clarity of what circles embrace life.
I felt this one and will be adding it
to my masterpieces! Thank-you, Blue
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Blue, you especially YOU!!! give me so much encouragement. I thank you from the bottom of my heart.
Love light and Peace
Nansie
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i like the way your poem swings like a pendelum and rocks me into the rythem of it so smoothly. i truely like the way this poem relates to the theam of the contest in a metiphorical way without being to direct and letting it be subtle in my mind. nicely done... i cant enter i am a feature of this one but i think i am going to write on the theam all the same. good luck in the contest
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It is so encouraging to find wonderful poets like youself commeting on my humble poems
Thank you so Much
Nansie
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How wonderful...I adore this...
"Are we lost in time swinging to and fro?
dangling helplessly, afraid to let go
Close you eyes, open up your mind
Let the spiritual and physical become intricately entwined"
So many wonderful thoughts and feelings over come one when reading these lines....
Best wishes with this entry...
Many blessings
~A~
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Thank you so much for a beautiful comment
you give me so much encouragement.
Love Light and Peace
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