Oh, Wishing Well,
I'd like to wish
Something beyond my dreams.
I wish my family would come together
And not be what it seems.
I'd like my mom and dad
To be friends at least.
To celebrate our victory
We'll help bake a huge feast.
Oh, Wishing well,
I'd like to place
A wish that's so devine
I'd like to hope my friends will all
Come to school quite fine.
Oh, Wishing Well,
I'd like to plead
My friends will stop their fights.
They will start to love eachother
And sleep well in the night.
Oh, Wishing Well,
I'd like to add,
Thank you for your help.
I appreciate what you've done for me,
I didn't have to yelp.
Thank you for your listening,
I hope you've enjoyed my thoughts,
My loved ones will now come together
And tell me what they've sought.
Author notes
This is like my favorite poem. I just got inspired really awesomely and I've been writing poems all day but so far this is my favorite.
A contest entry
- Poet's Choice III by Luna Tique Fringe.
1750 points, ended May 25, 2008, 26 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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opps first comment *lags* right between laptop and stop *nervous*
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here my laptop work now!! I think??
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awww I really like and if my laptop stop I give a applauds
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I really enjoyed what this poem stands for. It is a nice work. Best of wishes always at writing. Shancy.
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One can clearly see the hope in the narrator's eye.
It's a very powerful poem.
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Great job..especially for age 11. Clear thoughts, beautifully expressed. Pretty good rhymes, too. Very uplifting.
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Wow, all I could think about when I read this was the total dysfunction of my family life as a youth. Take what you have here and run with it, when your turn comes to raise instead of be raised, remember it.
Good stuff.
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I loved your poem. It's very nice. I liked the part where you said you could help us cook a whole feast.
Love,
Molly-Moo
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I think the poem is great!! Good job!!
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