red wings

i drank life from you
tasted your submission
and swallowed every last drop of shame

A contest entry

One prompt.... by phoenixonfire. 300 points, ended May 8, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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phoenixonfire
May 8, 2008

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Intense is the word here! So simple and yet so strong and open to interpretations! WOWIE! thanks for entering and good luck!
Pri
- eoz
  May 9, 2008
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  had fun with this
  a great contest, inspired some great writes,
  thank you
  and thanks for the honorable mention
  zoe
Fourthaxis
May 4, 2008

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Whoa !
Wow, that is some take on the prompt!
"and swallowed every last drop of shame"
It sounds perfectly decadent! I loved the thought, it was totally outrageous! Bravo! Best wishes and God Bless!
- eoz
  May 5, 2008
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  thanks for your appreciation and comment
Perception
May 4, 2008

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Hm... I like this poem. It has one thought - yet very developed in a few lines... Very vivid and descriptive, yet full of distinct emotion and pain.
Good write
Best of luck in your contest
- eoz
  May 5, 2008
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  thanks for reading!