Braving this cold, wet spring,
I venture out to a sodden mess;
Mentally prying possible things,
Sticks, leaves, tending to depress.
Days warm up gradually, finally,
Grass and plants steadily greening;
I begin tilling, planting eventually,
Placing seedlings, fertilizing, weeding.
Meditative qualities of the process occur,
Communing with Earth and Mother Nature;
Attempting new edibles, pushing beds further,
Considering frailties of my own nature.
When all is quiet, sun and air warm,
I feel the oneness with all, bask in it;
Sounds, smells, feelings all form
Pleasant congealing of inner contentment.
Thank goodness for this long-running hobby,
Giving back more than one projects;
Without getting too gushy or sobby,
Allows me and Mother Earth to reconnect.
Author notes
Apologies in advance for some clumsy rhyming, but it gets my feelings out anyways.
A contest entry
- A WALK IN YOUR GARDEN by Richard Adams, A Winkling #76. by Lyndon.
2800 points, ended May 18, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - You're Nearer God's Heart in a Garden by Judith Chandler.
300 points, ended June 7, 2008, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like the "clumsy rhyming" - it does exactly what you were aiming to do. It's like notes jotted down in a gardener's notebook over a whole gardening year.
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Nice flow and rhyme scheme. You have expressed your piece in a nice compact way, getting across your gardening and you feelings about it quite effectively.
One small typo, I think - last verse, second line "projects" should be "project"
Thank you for entering my contest. -
there is a sense of peace and connection,
I so can relate to your lovely write,
and I bet your garden is gorgeous,
your poem certainly is.
God bless..
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I like the rhyming...
...even what you refer to as 'clumsy' rhyme and I like the way you have used the rhythm to write your enjoyable poem.
I like the humanity thrown in and the interjection of the human meditation.
I did feel awkward with the last verse, which, to me, felt like an after thought, and I felt the essence of the poem complete by the words. "inner contentment."
Well done.
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MMMM I could smell your garden and feel sun and warmth and water.
Very good imagery in this piece. Well done and best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela
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I didn't think ...
the rhyming was so bad. Actually, I rather like this. It's got a very peaceful feel to it. Not bad at all.
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