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My reflection hates me

Once again i'm deprived of sleep
And once again i cannot sleep
these empty streets
fill me with defeat

I rememeber those things i have done
and i remember when it began
that solum night that i done wrong

I'm not asking for a second chance
I'm begging on my knees
I'm calling at the top of my voice
can you hear my pleas

Maybe someday we will meet
and maybe listen, not just speak
communication trouble me
and my reflection it hates me

I'm not asking for a second chance,
I'm screaming on my kness
Give me reasons but don't say no
For I won't ive up that easily

I know i've made the same mistakes
and i can't promise that they'll stop
but give me a chance and i will prove to you
That my love can come on top




Author notes

hop[e this does James Blunt's song same mistake some justice

A contest entry

I've changed the style in this poem, do you think it works?

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  • Topaze
    May 6, 2008

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    Nicely written piece that sings to me. People ask me sometimes how I tell the difference between a poem and Lyrics. When I write if it sings to me it is lyrics. Well done! My best wishes to you in the contest.


    • Li snuffles
      May 7, 2008
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      Thank you very much.. i hope the piece sang well to you.. and no dischords anywhere.. lol

      Thank you for your wishes...xxx


  • Barely Breathing gold member
    May 5, 2008

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    It certainly does give it justice. Well done for this and all the bst for the contest. I like how you have used the basic outline of the song and made it your own. Well done.