I know I should care about the fact that I’ve lost…
But I don’t.
You’re just not the same person that I knew.
But then again, neither am I…
I think of all the times you were ‘sorry’
The amount of second chances I gave
Now, its my turn for a second chance
Instead, I am the one with ‘issues’…the one who needs to sort myself out
But, I guess that’s fair enough
All those times I took you back, I really don’t deserve a second go
Do i?
The time, and the people, I gave up for you
I guess that really makes me heartless
Doesn’t it?
But no, you’re totally right:
I fucked up
I have issues
I don’t deserve a second chance
I’m sorry I’m not the kind and forgiving person you are
I’m sorry I don’t do the things you do
But thank you for showing me what kind of person I am
Maybe now I will be able to ‘sort myself out’
… just like you said…
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venting. be as harsh as you want. its shit, i know it
xo
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now that you said that, yes... very much leigh... all over that!
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Looking at this now, makes me think, this is probably how you feel towards me. Thanks for the laughs, and friendship.
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this one is about leigh actually, an oldie but havent got around to re-visitint it yet (if i ever even do)
its not at all how I feel about you, believe it or not, I do care about the direction our friendship headed, hence I made an attempt at talking to you and trying to be friends with you again, which hasnt got me very far.
As soon as my sister is done with he treatment I am looking forward to havint lunch and catching up though, if you are still interested.
also- not sure if its somethign you would be interested in, but i currently have a gel pen tattoo of bon jovi taking up my ENTIRE back because i looked after the kids last night and alecia is going through a phase... *sigh*
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Hey sis
I think of all the times you were ‘sorry’
The amount of second chances I gave
Now, its my turn for a second chance
Instead, I am the one with ‘issues’…the one who needs to sort myself out
But, I guess that’s fair enough
All those times I took you back, I really don’t deserve a second go
Do i?
The time, and the people, I gave up for you
I guess that really makes me heartless
Doesn’t it?
How are u doing? No ure work isnt sht.. its a beautiful piece of art and I love reading your work ure amazin talent and beautiful poet. Loved the way you expressed ure feelings and soul into this poem. amazin and alsome work..
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*confused face*
Okay...it's very free verse. You can quite easily tell exactly how it makes you feel. Maybe if you give it a bit of time until you can look at it just a bit more objectively, you could put some rythym to it so that it would be more up to par with the other stuff that you've written. It comes across as more of a blog, or maybe a death metal song. Dunno which really for sure. I hope whatever it is gets better for you.
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read like a letter personal one. so can't critique. sometimes thoughts and feelings need to be vented.
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There should be another category.
This was so raw and elegant. This is pure emotion and in the end, isn't that what pure poetry should be? I love the choices in the line breaks. It gives it a unique sort of flow. In short it is great.
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parts of it sound like my ex, especially the forgiving part..
its hard.
it'll get better.
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Great Rant!
This is one of the problems I have faced in the past, and just recently have been dealing with myself.. I know how hard it is to confront these feelings especially when it is people you care about who are causing them, but you did a great job and made it seem easy... I have found myself on more than one occasion wondering why I even give people second chances, and then when it comes down to it in the end, its all blamed on me anyways, whether it was my fault or not.. I feel this, it indeed does hit close to home.. Wonderful job! Keep the muse alive darlin!
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Wow this was absolutely awesome I have friends like this also maybe we share the same friends, I really like this right as you say what I think a lot of us think about some friends we have. God this really did hit home made me think of a view of my mates that r so like this. awesome job darlin.
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Omg i love it! I hope the worthless less-than-a-man man reads this and actually UNDERSTANDS your true meaning. As in i hope he understands that this is pure sarcasm, directed at him. He deserves to feel spiteful ebonie!
As for the piece, I know you dont like free form (whats the proper word for it again?), but it really lets your emotions show, without the confinements of a structured piece...it shows more of the 'venting'... I love it and you know it!
I really do hope that this person doesnt cause you any pain - especially with the taking away the "B" one... (he doesnt deserve to live...trent and I and Ash and Stu will take him lol) I love you hunny, with lots of my heart
You hold in there babe, the #@%&^&#* one isnt worth anything more than your sarcasm.
Kas
xxx
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