Up in the sky, its a bird,
its a plane, no its........ nothing....
Lessening the point, denying action
to the woes them, his reason for
election.
Remember the definition, the
republic, ( where's the dictionary)
the people needs............
Lost to an empty suit,
Power
Power
Power
Why vote, we'll all lose
to the totalities.
Up in the sky, its a bird,
its a plane, no its..........our sin
come to bite us in the butt.
A contest entry
- Quote Inspired. by Naridill.
700 points, ended May 16, 2008, 4 entries
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Comments
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I liked this poem...not sure if I totally 'get' it. Reminds me of a cool lyric from a song by Rush..."if you choose not to decide, you still have made a choice". I wouldnt change anything except for maybe the end...I think your choice of ending made the poem come off as being not as serious as I would have ended it. You might have ended it that way on purpose though...either way...nice job.
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Very strong piece with its strong immagery and the voice of the poet..I can feel the impact and the truth of this wonderful poetry..welldone..
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Liked this... sometimes voting is like choosing the better of two evils but at least we are allowed to choose. We can stand up to the plate and make a stand if we so choose thank you for sharing this piece with us.
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You didn't put option in authors notes, therefore you will not be included in judging - as I do not know the option chosen.
You did mix a nice play on things between, however. The start and end seem too repetitive in such a short space of time but apart from that, an intriguing entry.
Thanks for entering,
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