Such beauty was never seen
until God created you,
I've seen lots of lovely women
but you have something new.
Your kisses unlocked my heart
you showed me what love is for,
passion that brought out feelings
I had not experienced before.
I asked myself, could this be real
or just something out of my dreams,
and as we embraced I felt in my heart
this woman is just what she seems.
Our lives are now spent together
and I'm grateful for every day,
life would be worthless without her
and I know she feels the same way.
For all you people who fall in love
be sure, if it's real you will know,
make it a lifetime commitment
be sure not to let it go.
A contest entry
- SHARING SOME LOVE by Whispering Wind.
700 points, ended May 16, 2008, 18 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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This is so sweet
It's a great story told and with a little lesson taught at the end.. something I adore.. and in this case - agree with.
Such a lucky person to own the sweet words you have said of them.
Thank you so much for entering and good luck.
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The idea is nice, but it lacks my focus which isn't a good thing.
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Its so beautiful it made me want to cry a little bit.
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Superb
A very fine write and tribute. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one. -
Simply and deeply expressed, this is how love should be. A really nice write. Well done.
'I asked myself, could this be real
or just something out of my dreams,
and as we embraced I felt in my heart
this woman is just what she seems.'
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adorably sweet
adorably sweet and well done! This is an awwww, how nice and it feels good piece of work. Your talent shines thru and it sounds like this is really important and touching to you! I don't usually like rhyming poems cause the words just seem to be placed without too much thought...yours here works wonderfully!!! all the best to you in this contest, and this is surely a winner!
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Awww... that's very sweet. LOL. Good luck in the contest. Nice Write. Kep up the good work!
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Just beautiful! I love the line...make it a life time commitment...and your words do sing of just that...A real pleasure to read...Thank you so much for sharing and for entering
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