Sunken eyes mirror,
Crystalline drops.
While tantalizing tastes,
Run rampant in the mind.
Beauty's sin.
In a list
A contest entry
- One prompt.... by phoenixonfire.
300 points, ended May 8, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Anywho, tell me what you think...
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this is profoundly engaging... x
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Hmmm... It has potential, though I don't find it to be dark, but rather strangely romantic. Either way, congrats on the bronze and thanks for entering.
Laura -
Love the last line..its just so fine and deep! There is lot of beauty in this write! SO deep! thanks for entering and good luck!
Pri
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Oh wow, this is really deep and awesome ^^
Good luck in your contest (fingers crossed !!)
Angel xx
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Oh no! Mine's awful compared tot hat lol. that was really good. wow. well done.
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Awesome take on the prompt! Loved the last line "Beauty's sin." the way it has been placed has a cursed finality to it! the taste of blood could be tantalizing (?)! LOLz
Good write! Best of luck in the contest! God Bless!
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