let me
climb inside
your skin
to see
the forbidden
pleasure that
lays within
In a list
A contest entry
- Contest of the Shorts! by Shahrazad.
450 points, ended May 6, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I liked the idea of "climbing inside your skin"... it was a really tangible image for a very common idea... maybe you can find something as equally impressing for the "inner beauty"... it's ok as it is... it does work.... but it doesn't shine lik ethe first part does.
Thanks for the write! -
Oh you made a rhyme! Good girl
Love,C
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oh my!!!! I didn't even realise that it rhymed! Totally unintentionable. Hmmmmmm. Love Juls
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