out of broken dreams
shattered
hopes and aspirations
new life is built
on slippery foundations |  |
Author notes
Just a thought I had when I saw this Pic... Great pic by the way.
Have fun at the pub I wish I was there too!
In a list
A contest entry
- Simon Told Me I Have To ~ PIF by Margaret Denham.
1050 points, ended May 8, 20 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
be thoughtful, tactful and HONEST!
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Just WOW
What an impossible picture to describe. I read what you wrote, and then it made better sense - LOL. But when I look at the pic and try to think "What does this make me think of?", NO...I can't. What you wrote works...wow :new life on slippery foundations. That shook me up a bit. WOW.
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I like the line 'new life is built on slippery foundations,' this poem rings a certain truth and that's wonderful for a poet to capture. Way to go!
-BON*BON
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Thanks!
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Oh this one is a smoothy, very nicely done! My best wishes in the contest.
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Thanks!
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Hey, great take on the prompt! (I saw this one but couldn't think of anything
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Good luck in the contest!
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Short but powerful! Awesome job relating it to the picture, although in a way that isn't expected. I like it :-)
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I really liked your whole presentation and thought it flowed well together.
Thank you for entering and Good Luck in the judging.
Margaret
P.S. Thank you, I had a wonderful time.
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nice rhyme solid...lol
Simon
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such an awesome pic and a great write to go with it!!! I love sand and hour glasses and the sort so this is just grand
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