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Un-Undercontrol

Here I am agian
Because of my sadist ways
Wishing the strange creature would stop
Beautiful tears
Chocolate sobs
"More," cried my mouth, "More!"
A swift jab
A long cut
And the body stopped
"Killer," I thought
"Haha," my mouth laughed.

Author notes

I.- Insanity.

i used word bank #1. it is kinda strange, but i like the "fighting w/ myself" feel

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  • fakeport
    June 7, 2008
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    delightfully creepy indeed. Short, sharp, and to the point. Thanks a lot for your entry.


  • infernalxfidelity
    May 5, 2008
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    hmmm...it was delightfully creepy. i liked it. good job.

    good luck.