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Peel the plums

caress wild berry
suck the peach
lick the cherry

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  • onesugar gold member
    May 5, 2008

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    DAMN! I missed this

    A nice little tease

    enticing to say the least

    Well done on the HM

    Luv ~sweetness~ x


  • Mrs LadyEnthralling
    May 4, 2008

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    nice i think you did a fine job teasing my imagination good luck to you in the contest it was a pleasure


  • D Saul So Sexy
    May 4, 2008

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    you nailed this greatly i am in this contest to. good luck to you in the contest this was a very nice piece you penned


  • plainoljoe
    May 4, 2008

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    had many initial thoughts come to mind from this enticing little write but stating them might offend a few. So best I say, you have painted a nice way to quench my lustful tastes

    Joe


  • Heavens Child
    May 4, 2008
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    Ooooh very nice. This is so well done. Best wishes and good luck in the contest!

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