I pack up the last box.
I will never come back... Did I forget anything?
Standing on the balcony,
watching the moon through the branches
of the old maple tree,
the icy breeze through my hair,
the twinkle of stars,
the low rustle of leaves.
The warmth of the kitchen,
the twinkle of the wooden chime
next to the kitchen steps,
the comforting voices of the radio,
my guinea pig's squeak
as I open the frigde.
The low thrum of the AC on hot, heavy nights.
The smell of lilac on spring mornings.
My brother's tricyle on the driveway.
Walking to the park after school,
the furtive excitement of hide-and-go-seek,
the crunch of leaves on the sidewalk
on the way home.
So many...
So many snippets of memories...
I pack up the last box,
sigh,
the walls are bare.
But I will take these snippets with me:
the little things in life
aren't little.
The little things in life are the big things.
Author notes
These are some memories from when I was between 6 and 10 years old. They're very vivid, yet they come in tiny fragments.
Great contest-- this is the first poem I've written in a long time. Thanks for the inspiration.
A contest entry
- they aren't little... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended May 4, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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this is great, Nana! i liked how, as i was reading the poem, i could picture all your beautifully vivid memories. i felt the comfort of the "little things" we depend on.
i also liked how the poem isn't depressing. it could be- you could've moaned and groaned about leaving home and how much you'd miss everything, but, instead i got a feeling of hope from the poem when you said "I pack up the last box,
sigh,
the walls are bare.
But I will take these snippets with me:
the little things in life
aren't little.
The little things in life are the big things."
keep on writing!!
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why thank you, sawata!
...and I like your strategy of quoting poems in your comments. It's very effective
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I wonder if I'll get points for commenting on my own poetry? probably not... or I'd be rich!!!!!
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nice attempt..bringing the depth of the prompt...I love this piece...thanks for sharing it and good luck in my contest..
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