He looks at me
But does not really see me
He talks
But never really directly to me
I look around me
But he is all i see
I talk about myself
But he is the only one i wish would hear me
Author notes
First Poem so be nice please
A contest entry
- All for All (im taking all poems and no rules =) )) by Erozay.
550 points, ended May 9, 2008, 38 entries
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final edit
good write emotion full
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thanks
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wow its kinda deppressing if ya think about it and i kinda realte to it too i can realte to almost all the lines
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Welcome to Allpoetry
This is kind of sad. Because I see that you are trying to say that you notice this person and yet he does not notice you.
Your words are concise and your point is well made.
Welcome to the site and good luck
Faerie
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Wow nicely done....I just left a relationship going though this while I was with him....He was never understanding like he claimed.....Keep up the good work
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Nice write madilin! I've unfortunatley felt this way before - so I can really relate to this poem.
AmBeR
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Nicely expressed!!! I understood the feeling you were sharing very well. It is nice to have you here...welcome and make yourself at home!!!
Az
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