Come September...
We have gathered Summer's bounty;
and ourselves, behind closed doors
safe and warm.
Last waltzes under a harvest moon,
become tangos between the sheets in our cozy room-
and the nights grow longer...
The whip of the wind smotes nature
while frigid fingers, thick as thieves
steal the jewels from our trees.
Citrine, Topaz, Garnet, soon gone-
But, we will leave the earth
to solve her own mysteries...
Right now there is only you and me,
refocusing our energy...
Come September~
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Author notes
Prompt: Late September ~ [83 Words] ~ Background: By The Madman ~ He's TOPS in my book!
In a list
A contest entry
- late September by Namita.
300 points, ended June 8, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best Prewrites From May 2008 by amaranthine lover.
900 points, ended July 1, 2008, 48 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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this is beautiful, I like it a lot.
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This is a beautiful write, Ithica.
Its sensual and vivid and contains a wonderful use of metaphors.
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A truly wonderful poem;
"Citrine, Topaz, Garnet, soon gone-
But, we will leave the earth
to solve her own mysteries..."
Very captivating line, that one- thanks for entering my contest and good luck to you with this very fine entry.
Namita
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A fantastic sensual write with tons of imagery! I love the flow of this! How you are hoping to spend a few more days in the warm weather before the winter comes, but you still are with your lover no matter what. Brilliant! Thank you for sharing, as well as commenting on one of my writes too.
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a very beautiful write indeed. if the contest hadn't already ended, i would have entered myself. still, this is very inspirating...
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this is a jewel, Ithica-fallen from your tree--loved it
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Wow dear I thnk this was an awesome poem!!!!
Gave me great big goose bumps
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Fantastic take on one of my two favorite seasons. Love how you turned the fall leaves into semi-precious stones. Such beautiful metaphors. Wonderful transition in the second stanza. Subtly sensual. Best wishes.
Shana
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Last waltzes under a harvest moon,
become tangos between the sheets
I love how this just sings to me so sweetly, I can just see it! Steamy! Teehee
Fridgid fingers thick as thieves - such great expressions you have written
Very Lovely write!
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A sensual and rejuvenating write ...
well done, Poetess.
Love
Myra
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Very nicely created,
i like reading it out loud and mentally, the sound of it is wonderful even when read plainly.
i enjoyed the rhythm/pace and layout i loved how you described the fingers as thieves and how you worked sensuality into nature and the passing of time, as well as using general(like the 3rd stanza) and personal( the last stanza) i really like the ending ^^ because its not really an end yet it ties of the poem so beautifully ( oh and on a side note i like your backgrounds)
well in short i love it ^-^! and want to read more
sincerely
Kas K Bubbles
Peace in Chaos out
balance of both
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Ah! I wish I could write like that. I love the soft serene quality in this write of yours. Beautiful!
Good luck on the contest. Keep writing.
Ankita -
This write has a very beautiful soft and sensual feel. "Last waltzes under a harvest moon become tangos between the sheets" those lines were really captivating! Good luck in the contest! take care
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Beautiful. An utterly beautiful creation. One of the better pieces of yours I have read. Soft, dynamic, and earthy. I loved this delightful verse. Well done. ~Pamela
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wow..this is amazing..
I adore the energy of this write...
Fantastic imagery..
I love the last two lines...
Best wishes with this entry...
Many blessings
~A~
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Thank-you!
And I am honored to be placed on your "Sensual Shadows list!!! I thank-you very much!!! cia
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Wow! This did turn out awsome! The poem is fantastic and the BG is amazing. I'm very impressed!
Love,
Amera
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Tangos between the sheets
I love that line and the wordsmith strikes again. excellent write
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Great stuff! This has a wonderful warmth and spirit of companionship. I especially liked
"frigid fingers, thick as thieves
steal the jewels from our trees." Madman's background is very cool too!
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A very soft sweet sensual write here again from you....as you have sucha way with words and expressing yourself like you've actually lived these things in thought in your life. Very well done as usual and best wishes in teh contest,
Evan
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