How so often we are wrong
To never share our problems
With others, who are in pain;-
How miniscule our problems
Become when we learn those
Troubles other people share!
Not 1-upping; not seeing
Who aches more, or who it is
That deserves attention more…
It is important to share our burdens
No matter how hard it is. And this is
Because a burden shared is a burden halved.
To share our problems is to no longer
Carry our crosses alone.
This truth is intricate simplicity.
Author notes
[I acknowledge: mom and grandma-you were right.]
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I'm here for you, kiddo - open up and share your pain.
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Why cannot we not see this? Why do we isolate ourselves?
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So true are your words here
Often to speak of our problems outloud we also hear it with our own ears and realize they arent as bad as I thought for it seemed as they were left within my mind they took on a different way one I could never put m,y finger on but today they seem now to be gone let out and now I feel freedom like never before -
couldnt have said it better myself... i absolutely love this group... a beautiful poem,
hugs,
georgie,
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nice
i liked your piec it was rahter nice.ad to not to be alone in pain and to share our burdens......is no longer to bear oucrosses alone makes for sweet simpicity
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So very true. I was very close with my mom and grandma too. I learned a heckuva lot from them both. Even I admit after all these years, they were right about a lot of things, but now we all share our burdens with one another. This is truly an amazing piece, filled with love and wisdom. Great job with it, and good luck in the remaining contests. Looks like you've done good to snag a couple of shinies already.
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Very good write
Yes as we become teens we think what our elders say has no bearing.Only we have to put ourselves through hell to learn they were right all along .But now their too embarased to ask for help and they hide away .Never hide away be the adult you so thought you were and admit it was wrong what you did and get yourself straight but listen for what you put them through they so have a right to be upset for a little while .Find the answer together and lay the fighting down
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Spiritually Influencing
Thank you for sharing this poem with me, it is absolutely 100% correct. Since your whole poem was about sharing pain, I feel I must share something with you. Go to my page and click on the poem titled Missing You. It was written from the heart, and I didn't want people reading it, but somehow I pressed that button to publish it and there it was. Thank you again for sharing this wonderful poem with me, it was amazing! -
Only1love4ever-Reply
Not 1-upping; not seeing
Who aches more, or who it is
That deserves attention more…
That is sweet that you added Mom and Grandma you were right.
There have been many times when I've had to admit this to my family...especially my gramma and my mom.
I hate to say it, but I hate it when I'm wrong! lol
This was a lovely poem.
Thank you so much for sharing it with me.
Good luck.
Have a great day.
God Bless
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What u wrote was the truth. Some of our problems ARE tiny compared to others and we just cannot see it.
Awsome job.
Good luck in my contest
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hmmmm intresting.
thanks for entering and good luck
take care
stephanie -
Moving
Thank you for reading and commenting on mine, your poem is simple but so truthful, i appreciate your work more than you know. Keep writing you have a talent.
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ah yes i love that first verse - we are wrong in our assumptions at times, a cliche saying maybe here but it is right, a problem shared is a problem halved well you continue that thought into the second verse. in the third verse rather than saying 1 upping i would use one upping ah lol maybe i should not have spoken too soon with the cliche thought lol as you say it
intricate simplicity - i used to have a name in this site called complex simplicity - a good poem
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Pretty Jenny - I absolutely believe in this and am comforted by your note. I will pray for you and your back...will keep you in my thoughts. Thank you for sharing with me and letting me see I must realize others too suffer.
Love, WolfHeart
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It is true. Our problems are tinsy-tiny compared to thousands of other people, but sharing them can make a world of difference.
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