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never trust a philosopher

 

 

 

 

 

late again.

 

here,

sleep eludes this edge:
too much light
and not enough angle
for contrast.

 

her, him and me,
a triumvirate

ready for the revolution
or for Nero to play
with it all again.
 
and there ...
of matches and lunatics
each wonders which fits
them best,
we hold a sweepstake
and take a chance
 
except,
fortune can't come here,
not here where even vacant

shadows walk alone.
 
we had a life

 
once,

 

with boxes ticked,
arrows set due north.
 
destroyed it all
to touch ...

 

nothing,
 
stared at the abyss,
fucking jumped,
fell,
screamed defiance -
never easy when only
whispers remain
to give.
 
and that cunt Nietzsche lied!
 
the abyss doesn't give
a shit,
 
it never looked back
once.
 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

  

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  • Fug-azi
    May 6

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    The abyss always looks back, you just never see it until its to late.

    Its an interesting write, though the slang term for the female genitals I felt was unnecessary .. I can see how it would give the reader the impression of anger, but still feel it was a bit OTT.

  • this is brilliantly done.

    god i could feel all that emotion seeping through those words. excellent.


  • Naridill gold member
    May 3

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    Raw, but poignant.

  • Awesome voice here . . . loved the Nietzsche line and the overall feeling of despair I felt while reading this . . . raw and emotive and oh so well done!!!



  • Feels like a rant/confessional combined.

    The abyss .. well, don't we all have some form of abyss? Though, I am uncertain of what exactly this refers to, I find it intriguing. There is a voice here that you don't often write in.



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