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Dream Holiday

The seat belts are on and the jets start to scream,
it’s just the start of your holiday dream.
All sucking boiled sweets for our ears when we climb,
hoping we’ll all have a wonderful time.
The pilot  informs us what height we’ve attained,
which gives us solace, if some doubt had remained.
Then after a while we thought we’d chill,
and sought to peep oer the window sill,
at the heavens above the bluest of blue,
and lying below quite a different view,
Of billowing clouds,of candy floss foam,
Tinted by the sun’s warm caress.
Like drifts of snow on mountain tops,
a sight that can’t fail to impress.
Long white ribben trails, criss crossing the sky,
That aircraft leave in their wake as they fly.
Below lie the fields of ripening maize,
awaiting the sun’s hidden bountiful rays.
A patchwork of fields, that divide up the land,
not quite the way that nature had planned.
An occasional glimpse of meandering streams,
seeking the longest way round so it seems,
then fields full of cows squatting in their domain,
what they do it is said when expecting the rain.
Arterial roads that resemble huge snakes,
and road island roundabouts, like birthday cakes.
After passing huge orchards it soon became clear,
That the holiday airport was looming quite near.
And both tired and happy and ready for fun,
our lovely dream holiday had already begun.

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Comments

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  • guardianhost gold member
    July 6

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    I like the content and the story flowed as it unfolded

    It is a little long but I found it very easy to follow. The imagery is spot on. well done and well said.


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    January 22
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    a lovely piece thanks for entering


  • tony yates silver member
    January 19
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    fine write

    thank you


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    October 18, 2008

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    Excellent descriptions for that dream date. Great write, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.

    ♥
    whisper


  • BluRosePoet8488
    September 28, 2008

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    A wonderful trip you just took me on... keep dreaming this wonderful dream. Thanks for sharing. keep the ink flowing and good luck!
    ~Donna~


  • daviscth silver member
    September 4, 2008

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    This is a wonderful light-hearted imagery filled poem. thanks for taking me along for your adventure.
    I enjoyed the trip.


  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    August 12, 2008
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    Great trip you took me on enjoyed it. Thank you for entering my contest.

  • know one
    August 10, 2008
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    awesome

    The rhyme is great!thanks for entering my contest!


  • sora.
    August 6, 2008
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    =D

    ohhhh holiday fun!
    i can almost taste the shirley temples.
    ^-^
    great work!


  • lightswitches
    July 31, 2008

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    This was great. It just takes you on a trip from beginning to end. And that was a great thing!
    thanks for entering!


  • liduen silver member
    July 12, 2008

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    This is a great poem with nice, natural rhyming. The flow is very nice. However, I don't see how this fits any of my prompts - please clarify. Great job


  • l33t-n1nj4
    July 9, 2008
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    that was good. I like the rythem. it flows well and it is written very well


  • Violet Moodswing Greeters member
    June 26, 2008
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    Sigh, dream holidays, what could be better. LoL, of course this year, we darn near have to win the lottery to buy a ticket to get there so we may all be dreaming a little more that past years

    Good descriptions that really give me the feel of taking it all in.

    Thanks for your entry.

    • judmc
      June 27, 2008
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      His girl forever

      Many Thanks For your kind comments on"Kate's Baby" much appreciated, glad you enjoyed it Mystic.Best Wishes George.

    • judmc
      June 27, 2008

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      Violet Moodswing

      many thanks for your kind comments on "Dream Holiday"
      (We can't afford one either)Glad you liked it Best Wishes George ++++


  • Erotik Rose silver member
    June 21, 2008

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    A great view from above, it's been a long time since i've been on a plane and i'm sure i will not be going on any planes in my future, fear has seemed to have grown within me. Thank you for entering the contest and good luck.


  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    June 14, 2008

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    This is an awesome poem. It reminds me of the first time I ever flew. I wanted that window seat so I could look out at the clouds and stuff. I really enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.

    • judmc
      June 15, 2008
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      Brazos

      Many Thanks for your kind comments on "You're Beautiful"
      Best Wishes George

    • judmc
      June 15, 2008
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      SadCatLover

      Many Thamnks for your kind comments on dream holiday
      very much appreciated glad you liked it.Best Wishes George


  • Intricate Wordsmith
    June 11, 2008

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    If you are going to enter my contest I would appreciate it if you would follow the rules. You are lacking in your Author's Notes:
    ~Main Idea of the Poem


  • WatchingStars
    June 8, 2008
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    like the rhyming scheme in this. it reminds me of when i went flying. good job and good luck!


  • Peachy
    June 6, 2008

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    Nice imagery and details in this.
    The rhyme flows nicely and uses just the right words. The words seem to fit in their place like they were made for it.
    Good Luck!


  • TheDemonEve
    May 30, 2008

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    Wonderful imagery, it creates a breathtaking mental image. Even my own literal images from flying in a plane cannot rival this. Lovely!

    Best of luck and thanks for entering!


  • SmartBrick
    May 29, 2008
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    nice poem!~


    signed confused


  • Ithica silver member
    May 22, 2008

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    Sounds wonderful!!! I thoroughly enjoyed the imagery of a dream vacation via the wild blue yonder... hehe!! Thank-you so much for entering!!!


  • Jessie Lynn
    May 4, 2008

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    This is a very nice poem, however, because this is a contest for kids, (it is stated in the rules 15 and younger), in all fairness I have to remove your poem from the contest.

    Sorry

    • judmc
      May 4, 2008
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      Jessie Lynn

      I should be the one to be sorry I got my "by"mixed up with "for".little children I thought "great the kids will love this.(I've
      got 2 grand children).My appoligies and Best Wishes George ++++


  • TattooedBeauty
    May 3, 2008
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    Lovely! It reminds me of my first flight. Truly enjoyable!.

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