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The Storm is Over

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With you I was so intoxicated with your taste
Love, Passion and Hate where so interlaced

At times it was harsh and there was pain
Our fights… we could not restrain

So many things that I do regret
How I wish we never would have met

I wish I could only start to comprehend
What you saw in me, my heart could not amend

My days are dark and my nights are cold
Thinking of the day, your little hand I did hold

But you will never know, you'll never see
All the pain, all the anguish in me

The time has come to take it all down
As all my tears flood to the ground

Seven years have just passed us by
And in the end, need we wonder why

This forbidden love was never meant to be
That I know… that we both can agree

Cupid  must have been a bit insane
But I have truly loved you all the same

I miss you though and probably always will
But to be together again would be our fatal pill

Now we depart and go our own ways
Only for the hope of better days

Although the canvas of my life I must redo
Me Amor... I'll never forget about you

 

Goodbye Amor...

Author notes

This Spanish untamed one was the love of my life...... too bad I wasn't hers.

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  • Grunts Girl
    August 23
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    umm... cupid is always insane silly...


  • AsIThink gold member
    August 3

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    A wonderful telling of a painful experience. These lines here rang out like a fire engine racing through traffic: "I miss you though and probably always will
    But to be together again would be our fatal pill"...I would be surprised to learn of people who cannot relate to this...great job.


  • Aisades gold member
    July 26
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    Outstandingly passionate.


  • Piccola gold member
    July 23

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    Sometimes I think there is someone at Cupid's elbow bumping him so to throw the aim off. So many relationships turn deadly. Fodder for poets though, so at least something good comes of it. I enjoy the cuplets. I am not much of a free-verse person. I do read it, but it is not my forte' ... sing-song rhyme is

  • nilav
    July 21
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    the truth regarding many lovers ...well brought out by those words...

  • Hakon
    July 19

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    Such truth and complexity in these words. Your poetry rocks! I'm very impressed by your depth and style.


  • Gwenevere
    July 16

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    We sometimes have to admit that staying together is not the answer for either party.When love, passion and hate entwine, it is a recipe for disaster, Ros
  • luv2dream gold member
    July 16

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    "I miss you though and probably always will
    But to be together again would be our fatal pill" I can relate so well to this.. I will always love my last love .we were together for 9 years but we broke up early last year.. I know it would be a mistake if we were together now. I'm in a better place now . Thanks for this write!


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    June 29

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    powerful writing!

    we felt the heartbreak and anguish in every word so
    tenderly written and placed upon each verse.
    Sometimes it is interesting isn't it.....love...and the
    soul of each...wishing perhaps we could takes pieces
    of each and mold them into one!
    lovely poem that really reaches inwardly!
    way to write!
    ears/Seattle


  • jcat gold member
    June 29

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    I am sure that this while be the portent to my future!! My husband and are so passionate together that it at times really does damage to our relationship. Perhaps we would be better off apart but I think that if he left me it would kill me. I am not sure that I could redo the canvas of my life after him. You are superb at getting into the mind of the reader and really making them think through what you have written. You force them to ponder the aspects of their own life. Another very well done piece by you.


  • Rovingone gold member
    June 28

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    Ah, how tragically sad and bitter sweet. Sometime I think that is the feeling that stays the longest with us.


  • Carolina Moon silver member
    June 23

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    I can relate so well to your write. As I'm sure so many can. You've written so beautifully on the emotions of love gone wrong.


  • Forever jaded
    June 20

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    AWESOME

    Ya know, there must really be something to that thing called the "Seven Year Itch". My ex & I just split in Feb. after 7 years, & your poem reminded me so much of our sweet, yet sour relationship....I LOVED IT!!!


  • PurringKitten
    June 20

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    Please pass the tissues for the tears are flowing quietly down my cheeks...a love so strong and yet filled with pain...never to be forgotten but just cant go on...sighs...I have been told the true test of a good poet is the ability to hold his reader...well my friend, you pulled the tears from me


  • Potato
    June 8

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    ^^

    You message is clear, and because so many can relate people will love this.
    However, try to avoid being cliche.

    "I made you cry, and I made you mad
    What you did to me was just as sad"

    This line is very over-used...ish. Heh. But then you come up with the cupid line and I'm like, this guy is creative. Don't sell youself short with lines like the mad/sad one. You are definatly better than that.

    Your last three lines are my favorite^^ I love the visual of your life being a canvase!!!

     

    Keeping it real

    0< Peace

    Potato


  • grannyeri gold member
    June 7

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    These rhyming couplets work well in this poem - many can relate to this- relationships gone sour, broke off, parted ways. We will always remember those who shared out lives for this amount of time.

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  • Xianaria gold member
    June 7

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    Now we depart and go our own ways
    Only for the hope of better days

    I see so much of my own past in this write...Very well written.

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  • Viyanna Rosemarie
    June 7

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    Very True For Many Relationships!

    "Cupid must have been a bit insane
    But I have truly loved you all the same"

    how often i have said this very same thing the past seven years, and then wondered what in the world went wrong in my sick and twisted mind to even think that i could wonder like this about someone like "him". yet love was never said to be smart. thank GOD that healing does eventually begin, though it is an extremely painful process.

    you have written this very well and it was more than worth the reading. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the very near future.

    viyanna rosemarie

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  • Kleroo
    June 7

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    Absolutely Beautiful love has a way of taken us up and down and even when we love the person so much sometimes we cant predict how it will end I could not think of a better way of expressing this other than the words you just wrote!!!

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  • azlyn gold member
    June 7

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    This sounds like the rollercoaster of stormy love. Beautifully written and such honesty from a sad soul. It is so difficult to live without the one...the very one your heart calls home. Fantastic rendering of emotions.


    Az

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  • Titania Moon
    June 7

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    I can really relate to this. It sort of does make you feel insane to love someone so much no matter how much you fight and disagree. Of course, no relationship is perfect, and I suppose their desire to overcome all odds only shows how much they really love each other.

    ~Eva

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  • albymyheart gold member
    May 25

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    Cupid's insanity...so difficult to comprehend but so true. Forbidden love with all it's, passion, and heartache but in the end heartache wins and passion is just a memory.
    A beautiful expression of a love not meant to be.
    alby


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe silver member
    May 23
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    Another beautiful write...smiles
    many blessings
    ~A~

  • strawberryfields4
    May 22

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    very strong

    All of the lines in this are very deep and I think my favorite part is the beginning...and "But to be together again would be our fatal pill.." that's awesome...and "intoxicated with your taste"...great write.
  • fantasylandthinker01
    May 12
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    wow i really understand this i felt this way bout a guy..... thanx 4 puttin it into words

  • Room without doors silver member
    May 12

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    Outstanding

    I liked how you expressed your feelings in this poem. The bitter-sweet break up filled with regret and sorrow and yet knowing it is the right decision. Break ups are never easy to deal with. This is an emotional poem and I liked the way you said that you had truly loved her and the honesty. Thank you for posting.

  • Anyajoellienne
    May 6
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    very touching

    the feelings expressed so deeply felt

  • celticdreamz
    May 4

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    This is quite a relationship of ambivalence; love and passion mixed with not-quite-hatred, but a distaste nonetheless. Excellent write of emotions and I think it is perfectly titled. The emotion is so palpable that your reader can't help but feel them for themself. Well done. ~Elizabeth

  • Anyajoellienne
    May 3
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    I love this writing

    If only I could get to this point
    I live this


  • crazymomma
    May 3
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    Aww, so sad. It is nice that you still care even after a love gone wrong

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