If you were a soldier then murder is a must,
you’ll even get a medal, if many bite the dust.
Though when you're back in civvy street,
and repeat the trick one day.
They’ll simply put you in the nick,
and throw the key away.
If life were ruled by principles,
and not simply just by law.
We could solve our worldly problems,
without recourse to war.
Author notes
JUDMC Option no. 1
I am an ex soldier 1943 to 1948
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"Though when you're back in civvy street,
and repeat the trick one day." ~ this is not a sentence but an adverbial clause posing as one. Sorry.
This is the same grammatical problem and, again, I am sorry:
"If life was ruled by principles,
and not simply just by law." ~ adverbial clause of condition.
I do fully agree with your sentiments. Thank you.
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Winklings
Thank you for pointing out the grammatical errors in "The Soldier"
the poem was couched in soldier's vernacular or poets licence I have corrected it to suit but the poem has lost some of its clout in the process.An example of soldiers vernacular is contained in your comments on"Heroic Solder" the word "soldiery" instead of soldierly.Best Wishes George
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THIS IS TRUTH
PRECIOUS TRUTH
TO STAND FIRM IN TRUTH WITHOUT REACTION
AND ALWAYS KNOW THAT GOD IS IN CONTROL.
TO REACT IS TO CONTINUE ON A NEVER ENDING CYCLE OF DESTRUCTION.VERY PROFOUND
GOD BLESS MY FRIEND...
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Absolutely spot on. Says it all, really.
Good one,
Bill
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Wow i like this poem its short but you made your point. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
..<3..
Shelly -
so very well stated, life is nothing but politics, you said what i was thinking, thank you for this entry, good luck...
Lin
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