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Bosch's Nightmare


Broken on the wheel, stark silhouettes
Rake the ponderous sky
Ravens dive and chatter, children scatter

Corn rows stiff armed on the ridge line
Pig-men dance and frolic, aim their asses
At your startled eyes

Carnival fever sweeps the masses
Lecture halls suspend their classes
The buzzard's nest is blown asunder

Demons frolic over gables
Of pompous burghers. Under floors
Fat bishops armed with rat's teeth gather

Symposium of Bosch's nightmare creatures
Ripped raw from barely beating hearts
Neon crosses in the dark

On the highway trucks still clatter
Mudflaps tell what really matters
Mark it on your Rockwell calendar
Blind men thunder in the park

 

 

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  • malmadre gold member
    May 15, 2008

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    Nightmares are timeless, sleeping poorly brings on some strange images, now if we could just get them onto a canvas. Nicely written and just crammed full of imagery.


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    May 7, 2008
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    Fascinating.
    You have the ability to transport us into a separate world, an abstract and highly artistic one where paintings come to life and their creators are gods...
    Quite beautiful, and still has me thinking... wondering... pondering... lol... I think I'll be puzzled over this for a while.


  • Lute
    May 6, 2008

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    why does this make me think of Richard Cory?
    Odd I am. maybe it is just the burgers oopsers, burghers they seem to loom over things.

    If I were a painter I would just go nuts looking at them Dutch guys--well the fact of the matter is I am not a painter and I still go nuts looking at them Dutch guys. I mean that's impossible what they do. I am comforted by how plain those Dutch puritans looked however. Probably what prompted them painter guys to take such care with the lace that it pops off the canvas and wraps itself in your hand.


  • Amera gold member
    May 6, 2008

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    I like this! It's vivid and well pointed. You pulled off the rhyme and flow well and still delivered a rough image.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • funpum
    May 6, 2008

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    Love it

    love the imagery, love the rhyming scheme, love the rhythm...

    I have only seen two Bosch paintings, and this was not one of them -can you tell me the title of the painting or is the title the title?


  • cvillelisa
    May 5, 2008

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    psssssst, silhouette.





    Perhaps a different title. The title and the first four stanzas sort of make one feel like "ho hum a very good description of the painting" and then when the reader gets to the last stanza it is a KaPOW!

    But I think you could lose readers without a title that better ties the painting to the present nightmare... ya know what I'm trying to say?


    Last stanza is excellent.

    Lisa








  • jenneddin silver member
    May 3, 2008

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    Nightmare indeed.
    For every class of citizen.

    Adding you to my favs I am.

    I like the spoke that you speak and of broken visuals.
    Clever.


  • Zayra Yves
    May 3, 2008
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    brilliant...


  • WolfHeart
    May 3, 2008

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    Whew!! Rides hard and effectively. I wonder if you meant asunder... You write nothing that does not grab the soul.

    Sherry


  • MotorcycleFreak silver member
    May 3, 2008

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    Cool

    What an excellent picture of the typical day in the life in America. I see it everyday. I like the mudflaps at the end. Excellent ~Gar

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