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[ In a soft bed of deep green leaves ]

In a soft bed of deep green leaves
Sleeps a tiny fairy
Shimmering wings slightly fluttering

At the pleasantries of dreams


The golden dawn
Awakes her with a tender kiss
She yawns, stretches

Her trumpet-flower dress billowing around her


Circling over the park, as silent as a humming bird
She sprinkles creativity over a frustrated artist
Then watches his steady, callused hands

Paint the grove of maples as the rising sun licks their trunk


She smiles,

Content with their morning work
And flys over to an old willow to rest
Not hearing or seeing the boys whispering
Just the agonizing pain as the BB hits her back
And then nothing

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  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    May 17, 2008

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    Ouch, I had such a lovely image and then you killed my fairy! Great write, and I like the message it delivers. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.


    whisper


  • Cat10
    May 3, 2008
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    thanks for entering! this was such a light piece! then you totally switched it! nice job! and good luck in the contest


  • Heavens Child
    May 3, 2008

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    So much beautiful imagery in this. 'paint the grove of maples as the rising sun licks their trunks', what an awesome line. I must say the ending was very unexpected. The rest is so tranquil and then out of no where Bang! Very impactful. Best of luck to you in the contest.


    • streetlights
      May 3, 2008
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      Thanks. Do you think I should change the ending? I just normally write very dark poetry, so this was new for me and I don't really know how to write a sweet ending.