A thousand incense sticks I bring
Cleanse my heart of Earthly things
Years before, for gods I came
Truth, from my heart take those claims
As a fool, I’ve lived this month
Without a prayer to divine God
So here I bow, in darkened chamber
Holding tight to the last ember
Stepping in the stone dark pool
Anoint my head with water cool
Hear this broken heart and clean
All that can from man obscene
Where the tributaries flow
From Heaven’s divine gate, below
Silence in this hall does fall
But its beautiful, I recall
No closer can incense bring
To You my Lord, I did believe
And throwing down the tiny sticks
The silence felt so intimate
Perhaps, above I thought I hear
Your voice to say, “One step nearer”
Author notes
inspired by said photobucket image.
a spiritual transformation for said person from polytheism (perhaps Hindu?) to love of the one true GOD.
A contest entry
- - Take a Moment to Cleanse - by Desire.
700 points, ended May 6, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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A lovely piece...
A lovely piece; to draw closer to Him, needs to be our goal each and every day; nice job; congrats on the Honorable Winner trophy. --Joe
Perhaps you would enjoy this -
Captivated By The Light
The link is: http://allpoetry.com/poem/2833946
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: The Thousand Incense Prayers
This piece tugged at Spirit and as I read this several times I kept seeing a plate with money in it being passed also initiation and rite of passage...
Now this may sound strange but being shown~
Indiana Jones...and the scene where he has this object
in his hand and needs to switch with the valuable piece he must remove...without setting off the trap
Also was hearing words: Prayer Group...
Beautiful message and rhyme presented!
Powerful images You have brought forth
These lines grabbed and pulled~
Anoint my head with water cool
Hear this broken heart and clean
All that can from man obscene:
Peaceful take on the prompt~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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I really like this poem.I can't quite understand the last line.Putting closer and near together.Perhaps a comma would help.Neverless, this is a very well thought out poem that speaks of a true faith, Ros
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i was trying to say that it was a step in faith--a change of heart from earthly tradition to spiritual passion. Thanks for the help!
pegleg
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