A stroll in my internal garden
Never goes smoothly.
The path is uneven in places,
Often leading to a brick wall.
I'm scared of the shady corners,
That are overhung by dead branches.
There are heaps of untended business
That will not decompose.
I'd like to build a fire
To throw my worries on.
But only build a higher fence
So I can't be spied upon.
A contest entry
- A WALK IN YOUR GARDEN by Richard Adams, A Winkling #76. by Lyndon.
2800 points, ended May 18, 2008, 15 entries
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Comments
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very clever...
Terrific metaphor - a walk in a unique garden - plenty of thought and scary paths to tread outside the norm. I like to read something with a different viewpoint. I think many of us may hide behind that higher fence.
I like the rhyme of the last lines.
Well done.
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OH man, I too own a garden like this one and sometime I th ink the only cure is a bon fire.
You have taken this prompt to a different level. Quite clever and well done.
Thank you for this entry. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela
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