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~Illusion's Garden

Warm winds whisper
Tempting bare breasts


Seducing of innocence
The tenderness of her flame

Dancing upon stages
Of mossy petals
She keeps in time with crackles of open fire
Desire rules her heart

Trembling of speech~
Drinking in the promise
of erotic haze

Transfixed~
By the curve of open hips

Sprawling~
Satin limbs
and inviting lips...

Oh, but of the sulfur
as you gaze into blissful blaze

And of her beautiful garden

Illusion's gates~
You could never unchain~

Author notes

Dragonfly" by Tom Fleming

Tis very late, but I wanted to leave something for you.

A contest entry

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  • Arizona Sunset
    May 5, 2008

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    tickled to see a beautiful silver on this wonderful poem...seems that inside of every woman is a secret garden. Often a woman is a mystery to be lived, not a riddle to be solved...lovely! blessings always sissy...love you bunches ~ Trisha


    • Asdzaa Nadleehe
      May 5, 2008
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      Trisha~

      Thank you for this wonderful comment...
      you are so right..smiles..
      I love this comment...you have added more beauty to this write..thank you..
      Many blessings
      ~A~


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 5, 2008

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    So pleased to see a trophy on this wonderful piece. Congratulations. ~Pamela


  • Ithica silver member
    May 4, 2008

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    There is just something about a woman, that is deeply mysterious... You can light the match but can you ever really get past the heat of the flame...??? Would you know if you did??? Hmmm...


    • Asdzaa Nadleehe
      May 4, 2008
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      Ithica~

      I like your comment very much...alot of truth in this...smiles...
      Many blessings
      ~A~

  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 4, 2008
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    Lovely piece. Truly this piece reflects a woman's inner strengths and the sanctuary of her individual garden she relies upon for survival. Wonderful to this prompt. Well done.


    • Asdzaa Nadleehe
      May 4, 2008

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      Pamela~

      Thank you my dear for your wonderful comment and for reading me once again....
      Many blessings
      ~A~


  • Blue Rew silver member
    May 4, 2008

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    This is achingly beautiful with its interplay of
    delicate and flaming tones. I love the title, but
    the ending line steals the show! So much of the
    feminine divine is kept as mystery or illusion.
    This is a very effective take on the prompt & art.
    Blue

    • Asdzaa Nadleehe
      May 4, 2008
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      Blue~

      I believe the ending is the show stopper as well...smiles...
      as it was intended to be!
      I believe that inside every woman is an secret garden.
      some share every seed that is hidden deep inside..while others protect its core...
      for reasons only she knows..
      This is the greatest mystery or illusion of all...
      Enough said...smiles
      Thank you so much for this beautiful comment and for hosting yet another lovely contest...
      many blessings
      ~A~


  • Robin Candor
    May 3, 2008

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    You and I are so very different, but so much alike at the same time. We both grab and claw at 'something' no matter what the topic. In this write you got the erotic flower blooming so to speak and it did work! The problem for me is that I am not sure if it worked in its earnestness or because I knew it was you. What I'm saying is that if I was reading author unknown, I'm not sure it would have been as erotic. It's you! It's because it's you! RC

    • Asdzaa Nadleehe
      May 3, 2008
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      RC~

      Your comment is very flattering...
      I have been very busy lately working on side projects, I have neglected several dear Ap friends.
      I visited this contest again then decided to go to bed...however..this little dragonfly wouldnt allow sleep..so I wrote her words in red, which I never do...placed them in my notebook that I keep on my bed side table and then tried for sleep again...As you can see her thoughts as well as mine, needed to be placed here.
      I would agree that this really is not my norm..If I have one?...lol
      I do thank you so very much for this lovely comment...
      Many blessings
      ~A~

  • tara wilson gold member
    May 3, 2008

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    "Trembling of speech~
    Drinking in the promise
    of erotic haze"

    wow - this is very sensual & beautiful, a gorgeous poem & title...reminds me of a garden that one can only look at but not enter




    • Asdzaa Nadleehe
      May 3, 2008
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      ~ardentMarch

      Thank you so much my dear...
      To admire her beauty from afar...humm I like the thought of that...smiles

      Many blessings
      ~A~


  • requiempoet gold member
    May 3, 2008

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    Fourth stanza I think you meant "speech" but like your other work it's flawless. It has a beautiful quality...you've described the picture very well

    • Asdzaa Nadleehe
      May 3, 2008
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      I must~

      You are right..I did in fact mean speech..I posted this very, very late...grr..thank you for reading, nice to see you here again.
      Many blessings
      ~A~


  • Barely Breathing gold member
    May 3, 2008

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    This is such a lovely write. The imagery here was beautiful and you painted such a wonderful picture for the reader. Well done.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    May 3, 2008

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    Wow,

    Amazing Sweet Sis! I love this piece!
    So wonderfully worded and captivating as well.
    Thanks for sharing, and you are very gifted!

    Much love and light~
    -Bro Timothy

    • Asdzaa Nadleehe
      May 3, 2008
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      Timothy~

      Thank you so much for yet another amazing comment...smiles
      Many blessings to you as well my dear brother.
      Sis ~A~

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