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and just when

and just when what little trust i had fails,
it comes crashing to the ground like a frail object,
the clay pot here on my desk,
or maybe the glass vase still holding week old roses...

and just when what little faith i had floats away,
it instead sinks like a brick to the ground,
stiring up dirt for the seekers to only find,
that there is nothing where it was thought to be.

and just when i thought i could love,
i found myself turning back to he who held it,
my heart within his hand to have forever,
and to use it against me when wished

and just when i thought i found someone new,
comments of such despair and betrayal were made,
to frighten me into the corner of a dark room,
to feel trapped as a useless being...

and just when i realized i still loved he who broke my heart,
he came back to me to protect me,
to show someway through this endless pit of denial,
and to once again get my hopes up with only failure...

just when i realized the right guy is the jerk,
i see that none of this can happen again.
i see that i need to have a new beginning,
just like those one week roses still within the vase...

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  • Judith Chandler
    May 21, 2008

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    I like the way you have set this up as a series of metaphors and I especially like the way you bring it back at the end to the vase of flowers you mentioned in the first verse.

    Good luck.


  • DawnKestrel
    May 19, 2008

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    I love how every verse starts with just when.
    Good luck in my contest!


  • PaiigeBARBIE
    May 9, 2008

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    gahh dear, this
    is so pretty.
    i truly feel this.
    XD
    beautiful.
    don't forget bby, you must cmnt 2 poems.


  • BabyBun silver member
    May 8, 2008
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    Great title and crafting


  • MrsJones
    May 3, 2008

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    Really nice write, simple and heartfelt. I liked the word choice and the repetition you used in this as well, you did a great job letting the reader feel what you felt. It also ends well too, realizing when to let go instead of going back.

    Thanks for entering!

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