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Satin and Lace

An older time of ages ago
in a land not so far away.
It was a time of flowing gowns,
made of satin and lace.
Cream white and royal blue
the colors that were common.
Dances were the trend,
those of ballroom style.

Dance into the night,
sore and still on smiling.
It's againist the rules
to leave with you, I know.
I can't help myself.
It's too hard to resist.
Sneak out of the room,
unheard above the music.
Crawling up the stairs,
anticipating what awaits.
Up into the attic,
you follow close behind.

Lock the doors
and latch the window.
Alone at last we are;
it's what I've wanted, right?
I don't want it anymore!
The way you walk closer,
starts to scare me.
And the way you speak,
supposedly soothing,
rocks my being to its core.
I dash toward the door.
You catch me halfway.
I cannot screech a sound,

A ribbon of satin and lace,
tight around my neck
matches perfectly with my dress.
Should've known this was my end;
I should've been smart enough,
smart enough to stay...

Author notes

Betcha never expected that huh? Hehe. I was feeling a tad dark. I hope you enjoyed.

(The prompt was the title, Satin and Lace. Okay well originally it was Lace and Satin... I hope you don't mind that I switched the order. )

"5.Write something twisted, whether it starts out happy and goes sad or the other way around. Anything that makes you go 'when did that happen?' at the end."
^Option Choice^ I hope it fit. I thought it did.

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  • NooNiThEWitcH
    June 6, 2008

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    I must say.. I Never Expected this!
    I like it though it is dark and sad.. Also the beginning does not prepare the reader for the ending.. I love the beginning .. it reminded me of those old movies and those old gowns.. your choice of colours and words is excellent.

    Well done, I loved this poem.
    Keep on writing and thank you for entering my contest.

    Nooni