hate.love.blood.
i watch my life drip from my sethered wrist
Drip.Drip.Drip
watch his soul slip out of his dead body
then i think
i killed my lover
i go and get a knife
come back, i stand next to him
put the knife to my throat
press and pull
blood drips from my throat
i fall to the ground
right next to my lover
together in soul, but not in body
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Amazing!! Great Word choice! Great detail and pain in your writing. Though I don't think you killed your lover (well I hope not), you could of definitely fooled me. Well done
Sydney
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Awesome!Though I really hope u didnt actually kill ur lover!lol
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This sounds somewhat like a twisted Romeo and Juliet tale. I like it. The last line is my favorite. Great work.
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Welcome to All Poetry
this is a powerful write that is written extremly well with deep and poetic imagery and emotion. the short lines adds the effect of a shock which really helps to emphasize the meaning of the poem.
It is beautifully and poetically written well done.
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i love it! *daydreams*
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i realy like this cant realy tell u y i just do........its interesting and so darkly sweet and romantic
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cool
wow not bad....I liked it short and not so sweet!!! Being together in soul is better anyway becauseit lasts forever.
~Jessi
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