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2nd last failure

it fell apart befor my eyes
i made my last mistake
a grave left in ruin
my own grave and i must lie in it
it may have been my last mistake
but its my second last failure
my last failure
will be failing at living for you

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  • DonSulliven
    November 25, 2008

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    i justlove this bit

    "it may have been my last mistake
    but its my second last failure
    my last failure
    will be failing at living for you"

    its so sweet and sipmle.its a short poem at its best. good work


  • Simply Simple
    May 3, 2008

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    I like this one. It's really short but so insightful. The colors are a little hard to read... But that could just be me. Anyway, I really liked this one. Nice write. Infinately clappys my friend.