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[ Six Weeks... ]

Six Weeks...

 

Six weeks and I'm still breathing.

Six weeks and I'm still standing.

Six weeks and I'm still here.

And on my soul I'm thirsting...

I never thought that you'd ever leave. I never imagined that you would ever die. And I don't if this will break my heart or be the death of me. At the end of this road I'm seeing him.

I won't let my heart break.

I won't let my soul burn.

I will not let this be the death of me.

How could you leave me? What'd I do wrong? What'd I say that made you lie down? Is this a lesson I need to learn? Is this a way to save me? Is this a way to believe? Is this a miracle that I can't see?

Six weeks and I'm still breathing.

Six weeks and I'm still standing.

Six weeks and I'm still here.

Six weeks of not understanding.

I don't want to move on. I want to live in dreams where you laugh and smile on. I don't want to be weak. And I don't want to be strong. I don't want hear your name but I'm screaming for you to return.

Six weeks and I'm still breathing.

Six weeks and I'm still standing.

Six weeks and I'm still here.

Six weeks and I'm still in shock.

I can't help her and it's killing me. There's no way to make her stop crying. I don't know what to say when I still won't believe. How do I tell her she'll be fine? How do I take your place? How will I love her like you? How will I make the pain subside? How can I make her love again? How can I keep from Demons? How can I help her?

Six weeks and I'm still breathing.

Six weeks and I'm still standing.

Six weeks and I'm still here.

Six and I'm still angry.

Why is this happening now? How is it fair to me to not hear you? How will I be a good person without you? Why did He take you? Why now? Why this time? It's not time and we're not ready. I'm not a woman yet and I'm not a girl and I need your guidence. I still need you because you knew me so well.

Six weeks and I'm still breathing!

Six weeks and I'm still standing!

Six weeks and I'm still here!

Six weeks and I'll never see.

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  • DreamerOfTheStars
    August 13, 2008

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    this is really good yet painful... I'm sorry you had to suffer this loss.it sucks when things like this happen... AWESOME WRITE
    always~Steph


  • hopelesspoet
    July 16, 2008

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    This is beautiful and painful to read at the same time i wish you luck on your journey and in the contest blessed be


  • Avalin
    May 14, 2008

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    Welcome To All Poetry!

    I felt the burning pain throughout this poem probably because I can relate and I know how hard it is to lose somebody. Just reading this brought some of those emotions back. You where very honest and open throughout this piece and I feel this strenghtened it. I also like the repetition throughout the piece as I feel it hammered home the feeling of loss, frustration and pain! I enjoyed this, thanks for posting!

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  • TakenforLife
    May 3, 2008
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    Personally it effects me alot! I lost a close close friend and was left in charge of taking care of his wife and kids till they got on thier feet again! It was a very hard timefor me and the quections you put in here ran through my head alot! Awesome write!


  • Nephlim
    May 3, 2008
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    Me, personally? I've never lost anyone really close to me, but through this poem, I felt an ounce of the pain that it could hold. I loved how you were able to get across all of your emotion, anger, confusion, question, hurt, all at the same time. Beautifully written
    GREAT job
    diggin it majorly
    A++wesome


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    May 2, 2008

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    stunning. left absolutely speechless. you portrayed your anger and emotion from your loss so well in this piece. very well penned. I could feel your pain in this.

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