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Taste The Rainbow

 

Fields of color
Sway amongst the day
Displaying such a creation
Adopting the rainbow
Upon itself

Look. Can't you see?
The flowers encourage onlookers
Gawking at their beauty
Such a sight to see
Flowers of all shapes and sizes
Various colors make up these
Fields of Crayola
Gaze upon it
Graze upon it - O' animal
Before it is too late
And the rainbow turns to grey

 

 

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  • DogFish silver member
    August 1, 2008
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    ...summer is never long enough!


  • movedon
    July 27, 2008

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    I kinda wanted some skittles after reading this! Shame it won no trophies. Great write.

    Warmest,
    Mylee


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    July 14, 2008
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    No, not that often. I mean, I could, I just don't. I write about whatever, I don't stick to one subject matter usually.


  • Olivias Violin
    July 14, 2008

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    "Fields of Crayola" - Nice!

    Thank you for sharing this. Do you write nature poems very often?


  • DawnKestrel
    May 19, 2008

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    Great!
    Good luck in my contest!


  • Bams
    May 13, 2008

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    what an edible day to join

    an adventure of the eyes

    the first stanza initially is a hint of the prompt and then verbatim, photographic memory of its sunny imprint. your take is creative and reinforcing "Adopting the rainbow
    Upon itself" because the there's that flash of clarification of being uncomfortable just being stormed but grown... it's a thoughtful place to pause and see how lavishly we echo the balances that have been highlighted for us.

    the tangible glimpse of two-five weeks as few minutes wonder, "The flowers encourage onlookers" for another fruition to not be disconnected. Interesting, basing waxed colored pencils as the stemmed velvet scene. It's time to keep transferring the artistic reaction of nature. what consuming of real inspiration, a perspective phrase to step as event will smudge.

    compact concept,
    babies are my subject


  • Kelli Marie
    May 3, 2008

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    It's a shame to think that view would ever go away. Now, thanks to the photographer, it is captured for all to see. Well written. Thank you for sharing in the contest.
    Kelli


  • Blackbird Writer
    May 2, 2008
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    Very nice. I liked it, didn't uncderstand it very well. But that's what makes a good poet, the kind that will make you think.

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