Rapunzel... Rapunzel...
Why are your hiding your Beauty?
All I can hear is your Angelic Voice
As you sing to yourself
In your tall tower of doom!
Talk to me...
Let me see your Smile
Let me see your Beauty
for
If it's anything like your voice,
I'm sure you're a Princess--
so
Why do you hide in shame?
Are you so afraid,
That I may not see your Beauty?
Why else would anyone be held captive
Is this tower--
unless,
To keep a Prince like me
From rescuing you of your fate?
Talk to me.
Dont hide your face--
I only can see Beauty
And would judge you not
If this were not true.
For the Beauty I see,
Is in your Voice and Heart
Talk to me--
Show me the Beauty I feel
Without seeing you!
Slowly, Rapunzel responds--
And soon,
She is beside the tower window.
But she isn't beautiful.
She is a grotesque woman--
Disfigured by a witches curse
With warts and boils
And matted golden unkept hair!
Alas!!
The Price was still in love.
He saw not a grotesque woman--
But a beautiful woman
Whose spell needed be broken
With tender caresses.
And a sweet golden kiss.
But how was he to reach her
The tower window was high
And her hair--
Was not long enough to let down!
My dear sweet Princess,
Can you not make a rope
With the loom in your cell?
In awe,
Of what the Prince asked,
Rapupnzel said Yes!!!!
So she spun a rope--
To be saved from her doom
And she was transformed
in the twinklling of an eye
To the Princess of His Dreams
And they lived happily-ever-after...
The Moral of this tale is--
Beauty is in the eyes of the beholder--
It is not in apppearance,
But within one's voice and heart.
Don't let your eyes deceive you!!!!
dragonheartl
Author notes
This is contest entry of the twisted fairy tale of Rapunzel... a woamn hidden beauty!
A contest entry
- Make A Fairy Tale Into Emo,Goth.... by black hearted rebel.
450 points, ended May 16, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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What a tale you spin ~ Just when you think you know where this is going you get a twist. Most people look at the outside package without taking the time to get to know the person on the inside.
How alluring can the sound of a sweet voice echo'ing against the wind carrying its sweet song to a prince's ear.
The additional part that really gets me whether you wrote it intentially or accidently is you used a 'prince' as the one who falls for the princess in the tower. The 'prince' as being the gallant. Would he who 'gallant' not judge those he sees, but would be able to see past the ugliness into the soul 'hidden' by the witch... which is beautiful!
WOW ~ Really DEEP!!! EXCELLENT write.... I thoroughly enjoyed being carried off into another world... -
I LOVE IT
This was not what I expected but you blew me away and I loved it!EXCELLENT WRITE!Thank you for entering! -
WoW! Ive never read such an inspireing fairy tale. 
LUUUVED IT!
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im in awe as usual after reading your poems.. this is stunning! i really love this poem and the last stanza was amazing! your work is so inspirational because everything has a special meaning.. wonderful job i enjoyed it alot!
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Very nice! love the way you chngd it from a good ole Rapunzel into darkess *claps* props for ya!
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