You’re as delicate as a flower,
as beautiful as a rose,
with your love I feel such power,
I’m so glad you’re the one I chose
From my last date with you,
I’ve felt empowered refreshed,
some may say renewed,
that day was the best
I shall call you mine,
and you and I shall be together,
till the end of time,
from here on out it all gets better
We can’t wait till prom,
it shall be the bomb.
A contest entry
- MAD IN LOVE ! (PREWRITES ALLOWED )(EASIEST CONTEST ) by Alex Hex.
300 points, ended May 8, 2008, 14 entries
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900 points, ended May 18, 2008, 47 entries
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600 points, ended May 18, 2008, 30 entries
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430 points, ended July 14, 2008, 11 entries
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Comments
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Mmmmm My prom was amazing. Most defenitely the bomb. Even though it was just one big grind fest, it was still amazing. I'm sure Lauren is one lucky gal.
Warmest,
Mylee -
Ummm... nice poem. But it seemed more like dialoge. There is no rhythm or flow with it. You are just talking, sorry, and thank you for entering in my contest.
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nice poem but i wanted a pome about you!
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I really enjoyed this, a very nice, simple poem, easy to read and understand. I think it may have been better to have either changed the last 2 lines, or not had them at all...but that's just my opinion!
Still, a good write.
Thanks for sharing this,
Luck. -
a great poem to give, but as far as my standards I give you a 7 outta 10
The rhyme was a little off and parts felt forced(especially the last couplet) but the poem itself is very sweet, reminds me of the girl I lost(not dead, just like emotionally hollow now).(her name was also Lauren) -
wow it is full of love its adorable
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Whoo this is so full of love
it takes me back to when i was that much younger. Lovely words, Lauren is lucky to have had them written.
If u get a mo, please review one of mine.
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