Screams of nature surrounding
In light of darkness is where I hide
This calm midnight is where I walk
Too calm to be calm
Something doesn't fit
My soul is fighting to escape
The voice is telling me to run
But my legs will not depart
Swift as ever makes one with my neck
I'm not quite breathless
But one move and fear clings to me
A smile grows on my face
Something sharp causes the blood to flow
But I'm not quite done yet
There's still something left inside
My final scream or should I say whisper
'I'm finally alone in the dark!'
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Comments
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Too calm to be calm... That doesn't really work there. Try something else, another word meaning the same thing. Other than that I really enjoyed reading this poem. =) Keep on writing, until you can't no more!
xXDCXx
~Make Peace, Not War~
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Oh WoW this is some what dark.
I love how you pulled the whole thing together.
Great job on this piece.
loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
good luck in my contest. -
OO I love this, dark and alone wow very good
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