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[ All the pain that i feel inside,all the opisite feelings that should never colide. ]

All the pain that i feel inside,all the opisite feelings that should never colide.

MY boken heart cant stand any more pitty,just please send me up to the paradise city.

Everyone wants to play games with my heart,you never should have even talked to me even at the very start.

So pack your bags because i'm done with you, i dont ever hear you say "I LOVE YOU TOO"but thats ok dont love me for its fine, i'll have to find a way to carry on with my own life.

So let me be, please just leave i cant stand to see your face anymore just turn around at least.Just do me one favor as i tell u this  do you love me back......

A contest entry

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  • Erozay
    May 6, 2008

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    Short

    problem is its short i know my contest states all poems but when there short it annoys me not being mean it is good though =)


  • BlackSwan
    May 5, 2008

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    i really liked your rhyming
    only one suggestion: would to put your poem into more stanzas so that way it won't looks so much like a paragraph.