I'm going through the motions, as each day passes by. An ocean of sadness, i sit and try not to cry. I wish you understood, I wish you would die. Slipping into dark waters, I close my eyes.
i open my mouth, the water fills my lungs, My screams are muffled as my body goes numb. I smile to myself as i start to die, soon my heart will stop and my suffering will subside.
I see your face, your voice runs Through my ears, The darkness takes over and my life disappears.
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really deep write
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Thanks ^_)))
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Cool...
I love this... it's so simple yet so powerful and straight to the point x
I love the lines...
"I wish you understood
I wish you would die
Slipping into dark waters
Closing my eyes"
Well done ... ((Love Rach)) x Hugs*
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Thanks Rachel ^_)))
i enjoy getting comments from people who like my poems, i never thought i was a good writer untill i joined this site ^_)))
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just a small little suggestion for ya threw is inaccurate fr how you were using it you meant through that is how you meant to use the word and thats the correct spelling for it too. any ways this is a brilliantly penned poem and its quite amazing how you took the concept of being dark and drowing in a pool like so. anyways I can relate to this alot except I am drowing in a pool of my own blood. any ways wonderfully done & keep up the good work
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Haha Thanks, yeah my spelling sucks ^_))) but yeah, i'm glad you liked it!
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~sienna
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