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Everlasting

She Looks at me
A beauty so everlasting;
that when she left I could still feel her beauty

I Am intoxicating
I am enthralled
I am frozen By her eyes
they shine, oh lord they shine

with a hidden strength;
only I can see

 

I see a lot of pain in those eyes
I see the pain on her arms and bosom
On that embrace that last embrace
I held her tight her scent wafts
by my nose it feels like a natural high;
one someone must experience to be able to explain
But to me it feels like love

Author notes

This is one of the truest poems i ever written it is about a girl that i didn't expect anything to happen with but now i feel im falling for her anyaysd i hope you enjoy the write

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  • sassykitty
    May 20, 2008

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    good to read something so honest and open, you describe your feelings very effectively. some elements of repetition work well to emphasise the depth of your emotions, thanks for sharing


  • vampireprincess
    May 19, 2008
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    Wow this is really good. Very emotional... I liked it. Good job


  • i love him2012
    May 13, 2008

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    wow its...its...wow i cant even find words to describe it that is a very good poem what happened to enspire you to write this??


  • x Simply x Me x
    May 5, 2008

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    OMG this is beautiful! I wanna hear your love story ryan! This filled my heart with that emotion ahh it brilliant!