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The Beat

I said
I did
want to
come to
the club
with you.
It's new
to me
to be
in here.
I fear
the beat
too loud
too sweet
a treat.
At last
I've come
I'll have
a blast
with you
and with
the beat.

Author notes

By Approachingdrizzle

A contest entry

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  • aestival
    May 3, 2008

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    This is really fun to read. =D I loved the rhythm of it, and the occasional rhymes were ~ well, the only word I can think of is "fun." I loved it!


  • chasing rainbows
    May 2, 2008

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    It's really good - it flows well, nicely written, and I've never seen this form before, it's interesting.

    Thanks for entering.

    [stay sick']
    xx Sin